(haiku) From the Back Yard
Cardinal on fence,
Momentary red still life,
Flies away—that’s good
Cold morning air, one
Bumble-bee under flower
Following its call
Rabbit’s tall long legs,
Wary, lope across the yard:
Mitigated zeal
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May 2, 2016 at 7:58 pm
Oh I like this. Sounds almost like a children’s story cum fairytale and nature ramble. Well done 🙂
May 2, 2016 at 9:06 pm
Thank you! I’m fond of all those, so maybe they worked their way in.
May 3, 2016 at 9:54 am
a rabbit on your backyard!! Geez! take me! 🙂
May 4, 2016 at 1:44 am
This rabbit looked athletic. I was impressed. Fortunately, my sister’s dogs were looking the other way. What kind of rabbits do you have?
May 4, 2016 at 2:38 am
Geez!!! An athletic rabbit! That was awesome! 😀 😀 😀
I once had a rabbit. A white and very cute one given by my boyfriend. It lasted a day only. 😦 Because I let it eat bread. 😦 Idiot, me!
May 4, 2016 at 12:58 pm
I know nothing about caring for rabbits. I must enjoy them in nature.
May 3, 2016 at 4:59 pm
Sounds like a child wrote this poem and yet there is a level of depth that I think only a wise adult can bring. Which goes to show how well you did in weaving both a childlike innocence and a grown-up realism 🙂
May 4, 2016 at 1:31 am
Goodness, thank you! I have to admit, I saw these creatures in my sister’s backyard while playing with her dogs. And I felt as if I were seeing them for the first time (like a child’s seeing). But when I wrote about them, I was still me. You saw these perspectives coming together. You taught me about my verse.
May 4, 2016 at 1:41 am
Your good friend Christopher does greatly enjoy reading his good friend Rosema’s travel narratives. Publishing a set of poetry is a dream. I’m so glad you’re going for it! (See how firmly I feel about your work?) As to publishing, do you know jacquelineobyikocha? I think we were all in the poetry workshop together. She just published her poetry–here’s her post about that: https://acookingpotandtwistedtales.com/2016/04/29/finally-here-it-is-my-first-published-book-and-i-am-bawling-out-my-eyes-and-smiling-at-the-same-time/?c=30151#comment-30151. I think she would offer some helpful advice. There are a number of ways to go, I’m sure. Maybe it starts with selecting a general theme and then gathering your work. However I might help, I will!